Hunter Houston
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Post by Hunter Houston on Apr 14, 2009 21:55:26 GMT -5
I didn't like it too much. It had some really good moments! I, in fact, liked most of it up until the last paragraph! I didn't really like that the RP was focused around someone working out, that just wasn't very interesting.
And I didn't like that the reason Antonio says he is going to win is because he is working out and preparing before the match and no one else is... Ok, maybe they weren't doing it in there RP's, but I don't think anyone is saying their never gonna work out. The logic just wasn't well thought out.
I'd like some feedback on my RP's layout. If you wanna give more, awesome. But I didn't know if the BOLD and YELLOW were annyoing to the eyes or if it looked ok?
Let me know!
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Hunter Houston
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The Hollywood Hall of Famer "Hunter Houston"
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Post by Hunter Houston on Apr 14, 2009 21:57:34 GMT -5
I do love the use of spanish, I think you did it very well.
But another thing I don't really like, is that he says he is the BIGGEST underdog in the ICW. Let's be honest, there are much bigger underdogs. It'd be cool if he said he was an underdog, but biggest? I think if it was Antonio vs. Ralph Nader, no one would consider Antonio the underdog.
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Post by thumbtack on Apr 15, 2009 7:47:20 GMT -5
Could I get some FB for my RP for LMS?
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Post by thumbtack on Apr 15, 2009 22:25:31 GMT -5
OI I WANT FEEDBACK FOR A CHANGE!
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Post by Byson on Apr 16, 2009 17:50:14 GMT -5
Aight, ThumbTack!
I liked your RP, I thought it was the usual ThumbTack comedic, but can kick your ass style. What I did notice that seemed off was that normally your RP's seem well thought out, pre-planned, and that you had the idea before anyone else posted.
This RP seemed like that you wrote it right after Hunter Houston posted his RP and it came off a little bit on the bitchier side.
It's a very rare occassion that it happens with you, in fact, I believe this is the first time I thought that of anything you have written, but it definately seemed like you wrote it playing a lot more on defense then offense (like you normally do)
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Post by Byson on Apr 16, 2009 17:54:13 GMT -5
Big props though for continuing the Fenrir aspect! I was glad that you talked about that in your RP, you do great at keeping your feuds alive even when they have nothing to do with your next match. BIG PROPS FOR THAT!
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Post by Antonio Benito on Apr 17, 2009 17:59:04 GMT -5
second RP is up I again would like some feedback as I'm still trying to get back to playing Antonio as before!
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Post by Daniel Fenrir on Apr 17, 2009 18:12:50 GMT -5
I would like a feedback for my first Fenrir RP, If someone gives feedback I return it.
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Post by Byson on Apr 17, 2009 18:13:26 GMT -5
Muuuuuccch better then the first one! Though it kinda made your first look even worse, since you're now saying it's important to prepare mentally, but before said you were gonna win only cause you were gonna work out, haha, crazy, sorry.
but I really liked it. It actually made me think deep thoughts about stuff!
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Post by Antonio Benito on Apr 28, 2009 15:14:42 GMT -5
Posted my first rp for this week. I know it wasn't my best stuff and it was relatively short but it's all I could think of at the moment. Some feedback on it would be appreciated.
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