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Post by Justin Sane on Mar 6, 2009 2:29:56 GMT -5
I still haven't found Ki~ra as a character, and it does show. I'm working on it, but it'll take a lot of time I think. I may have to take him to a more extreme version of crazy, but I'm just not sure yet. He does need a lot of work, though, for sure.
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Post by Justin Sane on Mar 7, 2009 18:15:01 GMT -5
Can I get some feedback on the crucification segment, as well as the general direction ad attitude of the Antonio/Justin feud?
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Post by Reid Anderson on Mar 8, 2009 16:02:24 GMT -5
I believe I said this already but I enjoy this feud, and I think you're segment did due well for all the hype it had. I look forward to where this goes, but if Antonio doesn't start getting something good happen to him soon he might as well kill himself. Cause he's had his family threatened and he was crucified and that would be pretty much the breaking point for me!
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Post by Madison Manson on Mar 8, 2009 16:22:56 GMT -5
I'm actually looking for some feedback on my second RP from this past week. I had come up with a visual idea I liked and tried to find a way to work with it.
Aside from that, that segment this week was my second attempt at one, and I probably could have polished it up more but I was short on time. I think I need commentary writing tips more than anything.
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Post by harry on Mar 10, 2009 17:01:44 GMT -5
Hey could I get some feedback on the Harry rp? I'm still not used to playing a heel and i'm trying to understand it better so some feedback would be appreciated!
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Post by thumbtack on Mar 11, 2009 11:43:12 GMT -5
feedback for last couple of RPs how you like the direction Jack is taking......?
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Post by Walker Sullivan on Mar 11, 2009 16:56:23 GMT -5
I would also appreciate some feedback for my two rp's this week! I've been trying to put out really good stuff this week cause it's PPV week and Jack is one tough son of a gun so I would like to know how you guys have liked them.
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Post by Byson on Mar 12, 2009 3:34:55 GMT -5
Hello Friends! Just some QUICK feedback cause I am tired!
Jack, good stuff this week so far, though I know he is a humorous character, try and find some real ammo to use against your competition. You did a lot with Ronald, but your first RP seemed kinda lazy, just recycling the spandex things with Walker, ya gotta get deeper under the mans skin. But you certainly have the character down to a tee! Which is my favorite part about Jack, he is always Jack, it never feels like I am reading someone's writing, but that I am reading Jack.
Daniel's 1st RP was very interesting & entertaining. Showed a new side of Daniel Fenrir, which shows us more then "cocky heel", which is very good.
Erik Stillings 2nd RP was great. I would only ask that you make your RP's a little bit longer. It's all good stuff, I just wish there was more of it.
Walker's 2nd RP was very good, very face, and was one of your better one's. A lot of times I get annoyed with Walker, but his 2nd RP wasn't annoying, it was very well written and formatted and good stuff was said. I will give the same advice I always give you, make him do more things rather then just talk.
CJ Tyler also good this week, another great character that reads as if it was all coming from a character.
I will post some more feedback soon!
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Post by Logan Black on Mar 12, 2009 15:28:02 GMT -5
nothing for me?
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Post by Byson on Mar 12, 2009 15:53:05 GMT -5
Sorry man! Yes, I liked your RP a lot. I really like the shy, quiet, wrestler, with the energetic, loud mouth, manager. It feels like Brock Lesnar & Paul Heyman use to be but a little different. As I feel Logan isn't a heel, but just a shy face who wants to wrestle, not talk. Very creative.
Good stuff from Israel Adam's this week too. As usual. Though your EC match RP was sorta lazy I felt, the tag match RP really was good.
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Post by harry on Mar 13, 2009 17:54:33 GMT -5
Hey Jerome it's no biggie but you forgot to give me feedback for my rp. Anyway if you see this will you give me feedback for both rp's?
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Post by Israel Adams on Mar 14, 2009 0:16:26 GMT -5
You're a dick in all your RP's, hahahaha.
Funny stuff though, but dang man, ouchers.
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Post by jason on Mar 14, 2009 20:00:27 GMT -5
hope this is the right place to ask for this, but could I get some feedback for the match I wrote? I just saw that we we're allowed to ask for feedback about our matches so I posted one and I thought I would ask for feedback.
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Post by jason on Mar 18, 2009 22:12:03 GMT -5
Hey I posted my first rp with Jason. I'm not sure how I did I didn't have much to say so thats the best I could come up with. So feedback would be nice!
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Post by Logan Black on Mar 19, 2009 12:54:04 GMT -5
i will giv feedback and hopefully get it back. i liked jasons kings rp. it was a good balance of story and talking about your match. normally you get one or the other or the rp is 780595 words long.
now, can i get feedback on my rp? also is ashley adams still around? i was hoping for some competition
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