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Post by Madison Manson on Mar 4, 2009 17:44:18 GMT -5
I appreciate the tip about the text. I think the color settings on my monitor may be calibrated wrong from the last time I was editing art in photoshop. In the future, I can double check my posts on the laptop and not just on the desktop.
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Post by Byson on Mar 4, 2009 19:36:15 GMT -5
I am back to give props. Loved Madison's RP. She followed the same type of talking most people did, basically pick a name, why they won't win, then move on.
But what I loved so much was the quirky, interesting thing that happened between each paragraph. I was looking for forward to what she would do next or see next then what she was saying, which isn't a bad thing. I was very very entertained!
Erik: One of my favorite's this week. the trading card concept was so creative & entertaining.
CJ: Good work, though It was hard reading it all botched up in one big chunk like that. I think the character is very unique and I think you're writing sticks to him and does him justice.
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Post by Justin Sane on Mar 4, 2009 19:42:35 GMT -5
I'm glad to know my Erik RP was taken well. I was scared that it was a bit off topic. I also liked Madison's RP. She was really nervous about it. Hehe.
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Post by Madison Manson on Mar 4, 2009 20:15:40 GMT -5
Now my biggest concern is living up to my first one with the ones that follow.
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Post by Byson on Mar 4, 2009 20:19:56 GMT -5
I would encourage you to free up your talking a little, don't be so strict. Be a little bit more random, let it match your actions, combined it would be an awesome duo of clever, witty, fun, random talking & actions.
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Post by Carn E. Val on Mar 5, 2009 2:18:08 GMT -5
I would love some feedback on my rp's entitled.
"A video for the fans" and "It's all in the cards."
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Post by CJ Tyler on Mar 5, 2009 11:48:34 GMT -5
Thanks for all the feedback guys, I get what you mean with the botching it together lol it's an old habit that Ashley is trying to help me break
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Post by Justin Sane on Mar 5, 2009 13:09:08 GMT -5
In terms of breaking up dialogue, my advice would be to talk until you complete a thought, then break it up with some action. It doesn't need to be a ton of action, but it will help seperate things and look much nicer. Hopefully my advice helps.
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Post by Walker Sullivan on Mar 5, 2009 17:27:16 GMT -5
WOOOO I did get an rp up!!! Anyway since I'm here if anyone would like to give me feedback I would appreciate it!
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Post by Erik Stillings on Mar 5, 2009 17:47:52 GMT -5
Walker: I like the character. This is the first RP of yours I've read, and it seems you give the opponent a lot to work with. I'd say if you tidy up your formatting just a bit you'll be gold, but that may just be my own personal taste.
Either way, it was pretty solid and a fun read. I'm glad I got matched up with you this week.
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Post by Reid Anderson on Mar 5, 2009 17:51:02 GMT -5
Well thanks for the feedback I wasn't aware that I gave people a lot to work with I just try and find something in someone else's rp to work with and then I write about that!
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Post by Byson on Mar 5, 2009 17:55:34 GMT -5
I already gave Walker feedback through PM, so I will do Ashley Adams.
Ashley: Great RP. You do need to work on selling characters, I get that you were helping plant some good fighting seeds by the things you said about The Suffering. But it'll make you look better if you succeed against people that you talk good about. But I do really enjoy the character. I think you & Madison both do your character so well. Not saying other don't, but neither of you did a lot of actions or anything that didn't go along directly with the character. You guys just work solely on perfecting the characters, which is great!
I hope everyone will get a second RP out, as there have been great reads.
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Post by Carn E. Val on Mar 6, 2009 1:27:35 GMT -5
Anyone giving me feedback?
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Post by Justin Sane on Mar 6, 2009 1:47:19 GMT -5
Just read the second Israel Adams RP. Really, really good stuff. It was a perfect combination of selling his opponents and himself, all while giving us some fun background info. It was one of the few I honestly enjoyed from this week. Awesome job!
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Post by Byson on Mar 6, 2009 1:56:43 GMT -5
Israel: Justin put it best, good RP. I would've spent a tad more time talking about the opponents, but it was still an awesome RP.
Carn E: Good RP too, very entertaining & creative. Especially the from the camera man aspect you took on it, you really played that well. I would give you the advice to do more research on your opponents. As the stuff you said about them had nothing to do with them, just something a card told you.
Ki~ra: I really hope this character goes places, mainly cause he reminds me of Deathnote. It was an ok RP. It's hard to make him much more different then Justin Sane, Justin still is the better version in my eyes. I like the way he talked, it seemed like a balance in between Justin & Carn E. Val which worked well for him.
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